Thursday, 19 March 2015

A-Musing Poetry Draft

Sooo.. I decided to step away from the realism poems I tend to gravitate towards, especially about every day mundane things. This time, I wanted to write a poem about love, but I didn't want it to OBVIOUSLY be about love. Love itself feels so cliched in writing nowadays.

Here's a first draft of my attempt. Let me know your thoughts; feedback's so helpful!

The anatomy of lust

It starts in your toes
pink, jagged, curled at the knuckle
the weight of your thoughts
force them deeper into earth

your pale and supple chin
points to the ground as
your fingers thread your hair
elbow anchors take root

wind tickles your lips
dries out your teeth while
sentences snag on molars
words crumble to dust

your belly slithers upwards
suffocates your blood-soaked heart
slips up your narrow esophagus
rests in your throat

lungs begin to shrink
tongue starts to dance
matching rhythm to your hips

1 comment:

  1. I like it. seems that love and heartache are in the air forsure..lust too. I wrote a few blogs ago as well about love/lust without actually saying it. but I like what you have started. cant wait to hear the final copy... kathleen

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